Walking on Water: Friday Fictioneers

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photo prompt by Roger Bultot

 

“I’m going to the ampitheatre.” Bhoudi stamped her foot. “I have to, if I’m to be saved.”

“We should go with her. What if the end of the world is nigh?” Bhoudi smiled her thanks to her mother. She didn’t expect the appocalypse but she did want to see Krishnamurti, walk on water. She looked at her father.

“Alright. We’ll all go.” They walked to the river and joined the throng of Theophisists chanting and praying in the temple. The non-believers mocked.

Suddenly the water smoothed. A mushroom cloud rolled in. The insults stopped. Bhoudi smiled. “Krishnamurti! I am saved.”

For other Friday Fictioneers 

Historical note: Krishnamurti severed his ties with Theosophy in the 1920s and Theosophosists deny they ever expected him to enter Sydney Harbour walking on water. My Auntie Bhoudi, a theosophist, joined the throngs down by the harbour waiting for him to arrive.

About Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

I began my working career as a reluctant potato peeler whilst waiting to commence my training as a student nurse. On completion I worked mainly in intensive care/coronary care; finishing my hospital career as clinical nurse educator in intensive care. A life changing period as a resort owner/manager on the island of Tanna in Vanuatu was followed by recovery time as a farmer at Bucca Wauka. Having discovered I was no farmer and vowing never again to own an animal bigger than myself I took on the Barrington General Store. Here we also ran a five star restaurant. Working the shop of a day 7am - 6pm followed by the restaurant until late was surprisingly more stressful than Tanna. On the sale we decided to retire and renovate our house with the help of a builder friend. Now believing we knew everything about building we set to constructing our own house. Just finished a coal mine decided to set up in our backyard. Definitely time to retire we moved to Queensland. I had been writing a manuscript for some time. In the desire to complete this I enrolled in a post grad certificate in creative Industries which I completed 2013. Commenced a masters by research in 2014.
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48 Responses to Walking on Water: Friday Fictioneers

  1. Sandra says:

    All it takes is a little faith? Nicely done, Irene.

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  2. Iain Kelly says:

    If only faith could be rewarded with a definite sign now and then.

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  3. Dear Irene,

    What a unique take on the prompt and an interesting bit of history.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  4. James says:

    The mushroom cloud seems to be a bit of a worry.

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  5. Madison Ward says:

    A unique take on the photo.
    Thank you for sharing.

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  6. Varad says:

    Wow! Are you talking about J. Krishnamurthy? (Jiddu Krishnamurthy)

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    • Yes I am. The Order of the Star of the East was set up to prepare the way for his role of World Teacher. He came to Australia in 1925 and lectured at the ampitheatre at Balmoral but by 1929 he had distanced himself from this role and severed his ties from theosophy as he became an original independent thinker on matters philosophical, psychological and spiritual. The theosophists believed he would walk on water through Sydney Heads and according to my Father they sat down there to await the end of the world. This flash is very loosely based on that – I thought the water looked like glass and could be walked upon and the cloud – the end of the world and so there I was led.

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  7. A unique take on what would be terrifying to most of us. Irene, you wrote a lot of story in a small number of words – well done.

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  8. michael1148humphris says:

    Great use of the prompt, I nearly always enjoy historically based themes.

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  9. Jelli says:

    What an interesting relative to have, and the story, too. Loved it! 🙂

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  10. Lynn Love says:

    Your Aunty had a lot of belief! A very interesting take on the prompt Irene

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  11. Joy Pixley says:

    If that mushroom clouds means what I think it does, I think she has a few more minutes before she can determine whether she’s been saved or not – I hope for her sake that she’s right!

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  12. Thanks for giving us a little bit of your history wrapped inside world history. Nicely done.

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  13. A delightful snippet of faction! Nice one

    Click to read my FriFic!

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  14. So did really happen? 🤔🤔🤔
    I am more curious about that!😊😊😊

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  15. pennygadd51 says:

    You draw a vivid scene of the throng of the faithful, and the mocking doubters. The denouement, with its suggestion of apocalypse, is most satisfying.

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  16. granonine says:

    Love learning something new. I didn’t know about Theosophy–heard the term, didn’t know the history. Thanks!

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  17. Dale says:

    That was a most interesting take. What a cool aunty to have 😉

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  18. I enjoyed the effort. I especially liked the line about the non-believers. I have to listen to them myself as I am not a believer in organized religion but more of a believer in God and Spirit.
    Scott
    Mine: https://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2017/10/31/reckoning-friday-fictioneers/

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