Snake in the cloud: 99 Word flash Fiction

© irene waters 2015

© irene waters 2015

He stalked her despite the restraining order. Now threats from her new boyfriend’s mother. was threatening to kill her. Sonia barely slept, hardly ate and jumped at every sound. 

In her new home, interstate, her nerves in tatters, she booked a hypnosis session.

“I need to relax.” She said to Alfonso, the hypnotist.

He found her easy to hypnotize.

“Pick a safe place. A place where no-one but you can go.”

“I want my own cloud.”

Sonia sinks happily into the fluffiness until he releases her saying, “No-one but Alfonso can join you on your cloud.”

“Tomorrow then?” Alfonso smiles.

In response to Charli’s prompt over at Carrot Ranch where she asks:

November 11, 2015 prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write about a place of comfort that is a refuge. Have fun with it, like a pillow fight between best friends at a slumber party or newlyweds in search of the perfect mattress. Or you can go dark and write about unusual comforts, like a bad habit or a padded cell. Play with the idea of comfort and refuge.

Respond by November 17, 2015 to be included in the weekly compilation. Rules are here. All writers are welcome!


About Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

I began my working career as a reluctant potato peeler whilst waiting to commence my training as a student nurse. On completion I worked mainly in intensive care/coronary care; finishing my hospital career as clinical nurse educator in intensive care. A life changing period as a resort owner/manager on the island of Tanna in Vanuatu was followed by recovery time as a farmer at Bucca Wauka. Having discovered I was no farmer and vowing never again to own an animal bigger than myself I took on the Barrington General Store. Here we also ran a five star restaurant. Working the shop of a day 7am - 6pm followed by the restaurant until late was surprisingly more stressful than Tanna. On the sale we decided to retire and renovate our house with the help of a builder friend. Now believing we knew everything about building we set to constructing our own house. Just finished a coal mine decided to set up in our backyard. Definitely time to retire we moved to Queensland. I had been writing a manuscript for some time. In the desire to complete this I enrolled in a post grad certificate in creative Industries which I completed 2013. I followed this by doing a Master of Arts by research graduating in 2017. Now I live to write and write to live.
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20 Responses to Snake in the cloud: 99 Word flash Fiction

  1. Interesting – can be taken so many ways

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  2. noelleg44 says:

    Great, Irene! and that photo – woweewow!

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  3. joannesisco says:

    Whoa – that took an unexpected creepy turn at the end!

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  4. M-R says:

    Frying pans and fires come to mind …

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  5. Charli Mills says:

    I never thought of clouds feeling scary! Poor Sonia, I don’t see much relief in the forecast for her.

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  7. Gah! Irene! Why do you keep doing this? You know, I’m all sunshine and roses now. (Okay, not really, but let’s say I’ve gotten…less…um…dark in my writing.) I’m handing over the Crown of Darkness to you. Wear it well.

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  8. julespaige says:

    Brings to mind one person I knew sort of stalked by two different people.
    Is it any wonder they moved to the opposite coast?

    Snakes indeed. They are everywhere. Thanks for visiting my post on the prompt.

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  9. So sorry for Sonia, to be controlled by one snake or another.
    I do love the photo of that cloud and sky – spectacular. (I should count how many times I write that word when describing your blog.)

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