Moving house: Friday Fictioneers

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photo prompt © Victor and Sarah Potter

Holding hands, they took a last look at their favourite room.  

“Jan, remember when we moved in you ranted and raved about the spiders the previous owner left behind?”

“What was worse – he took the light fittings. Those colanders were only meant to be temporary and they’re still hanging.”

George examined the room, recalling and saving memories. ” I hope they look after Jezebel.”

“Perhaps we should leave a note.”

“Notes are usually left to say when to put the garbage out or idiosyncrasies of the oven.”

“Leave one. Write, don’t kill Jezebel, the spider. She keeps the bigger critters out.

Thank you to Rochelle for hosting Friday Fictioneers and Victor and Sarah Potter for providing the photo prompt.

About Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

I began my working career as a reluctant potato peeler whilst waiting to commence my training as a student nurse. On completion I worked mainly in intensive care/coronary care; finishing my hospital career as clinical nurse educator in intensive care. A life changing period as a resort owner/manager on the island of Tanna in Vanuatu was followed by recovery time as a farmer at Bucca Wauka. Having discovered I was no farmer and vowing never again to own an animal bigger than myself I took on the Barrington General Store. Here we also ran a five star restaurant. Working the shop of a day 7am - 6pm followed by the restaurant until late was surprisingly more stressful than Tanna. On the sale we decided to retire and renovate our house with the help of a builder friend. Now believing we knew everything about building we set to constructing our own house. Just finished a coal mine decided to set up in our backyard. Definitely time to retire we moved to Queensland. I had been writing a manuscript for some time. In the desire to complete this I enrolled in a post grad certificate in creative Industries which I completed 2013. I followed this by doing a Master of Arts by research graduating in 2017. Now I live to write and write to live.
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85 Responses to Moving house: Friday Fictioneers

  1. neilmacdon says:

    A bear-killing spider! I love it

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  2. calmkate says:

    lol great take on the photo, I can imagine the conversation taking place … the kind of thing I’d do/say 😉

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  3. Sandra says:

    For a moment there I thought they were talking about the cat. The spider sounds to have quite magical properties though.

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  4. Iain Kelly says:

    Shiver. Spiders are bad enough, what are the bigger critters?!

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  5. Miriam says:

    Ooh, this gave me goosebumps. Very clever.

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  6. pennygadd51 says:

    I liked that! Very true to life!

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  7. Dear Irene,

    I’m not sure I’d be sympathetic to Jezebel. 😉 She might kill critters but she could populate the house with her little ones. No thanks. Good story, nonetheless. 😀



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  8. Varad says:

    Nope! It’s the broom for Jezebel if I was moving in. Nice story, Irene. There are people who grow little sentimental towards spiders and snakes. Not me though.

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  9. James says:

    Although my wife has me kill any spiders we find in the house, folklore has it that it’s bad luck to kill a house spider and they really do keep other pests under control.

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  10. granonine says:

    I hope Jezebel survives. Or maybe she’ll sneak into a packing crate and leave with them 🙂

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  11. mumpoet says:

    Love the humour, the dialogue and the spider!

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  12. Anna Rymer says:

    Ha Ha – this is great! We’ve had many a spider pet – our long term one was Stephen with a home by our fridge 🙂 I love the reasoning with this one though – it’s not sentimental its utterly rational – she’ll protect you 🙂

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  13. Jelli says:

    I’m just thankful I’m not born of the spider sept… then, I couldn’t kill the little buggers. I don’t mind a granddaddy long legs hanging around, but in our area there are too many brown recluses and they bite and make one ill.

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  14. Enjoyed your story – that’s a great name for a spider!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  15. trentpmcd says:

    I don’t even want to know what the “bigger critters” are!

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  16. Lynn Love says:

    Lovely dialogue and very sound advice – never kill a spider! Unless it can kill you, of course. Great tale Irene

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  17. EagleAye says:

    Exactly! Spiders can be your friends. I always leave the web spinners alone. Don’t bother them and they won’t bother you. Even better, they’ll eat all the bugs that bug you. That’s a smart family there.

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  18. Couldn’t they take Jezebel with them?

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  19. michael1148humphris says:

    I think that I would build a outdoor spider house, it would be safer for spider. In the interest of the spider.

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  20. I’m not sure how note would be received. Probably, goodbye spider.

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  21. I’m afraid my compassion bypasses spiders. Bye bye spidey.

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  22. Joy Pixley says:

    Goodness, Jezebel sounds like she’s become part of their family! Maybe instead of warning the new tenants they should warn her — to stay low. Interesting take!


  23. Awwe, so sweet. After all, spiders are people too 🙂

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  24. You have woven a very delicate tale here, Irene. As far as maintaining the status quo is concerned i am not very sure if the new tenants would empathetic towards their presence.
    Nevertheless, a highly imaginative story.

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  25. I want to adopt Jezebel 🙂

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  26. What a brilliant name for a spider! My sister had a cat called Jezebel too. I know you get big spiders down your way. What do you get that’s worse than giant spiders?

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  27. They should take JZ with them – sounds like one of the family!

    Click to read my FriFic!

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  28. Dale says:

    Somehow I love their wanting to protect Jezebel. Which says a lot about this story!

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  29. Love this. Save Jezebel!

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  30. James McEwan says:

    Nice idea, but how could leave their pet behind?

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  31. Nice story, on trying to save the spider. Myself, I don’t like killing them, though I don’t object to others’ doing so.

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  32. I think they should bring the spider with them… after all there are always big critters (guests) to keep at bay,.

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  33. Jezebel the spider. I like it!

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  34. Dahlia says:

    Jezbel! What a lovely name and story 🙂

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  35. Moon says:

    Jezebel is an adorable name and looks like a part of the family . I wonder if the note with the mention of the ‘ big critters’ would scare the new tenants away .
    Lovely storytelling , Irene.

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  36. YIKES … I want to like Jezebel but since I dislike spiders I’ll have to say I would stomp on her despite their note. Great way to approach the prompt … with sympathy for Jezebel. : )
    Isadora 😎

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  37. We once had spider named Igor but he lived in our garden. Had he tried to live indoors, he wouldn’t have lived long. Fun story to read, Irene, I really enjoyed this one.

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