Saved: Six Sentence Stories

Maris woke with a start. What had alerted her; a noise, a smell but it didn’t matter, she had to move quickly.

Tears ran down her face from her smarting eyes and wheezing, her chest heaving with each breath of thick air, she slid to the floor and crawled on her belly hoping she wasn’t disoriented and the door was in the direction she was going.

On the verge of collapse she felt hands lifting her, into the air, over a shoulder.

Fresh air assaulted her and hungrily she drank it in.

From the position she lay on the grass she stared at the blackened remains of her house thinking ‘better a new start than a dead start.’

In response to Zoe’s prompt start for six line stories.


About Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

I began my working career as a reluctant potato peeler whilst waiting to commence my training as a student nurse. On completion I worked mainly in intensive care/coronary care; finishing my hospital career as clinical nurse educator in intensive care. A life changing period as a resort owner/manager on the island of Tanna in Vanuatu was followed by recovery time as a farmer at Bucca Wauka. Having discovered I was no farmer and vowing never again to own an animal bigger than myself I took on the Barrington General Store. Here we also ran a five star restaurant. Working the shop of a day 7am - 6pm followed by the restaurant until late was surprisingly more stressful than Tanna. On the sale we decided to retire and renovate our house with the help of a builder friend. Now believing we knew everything about building we set to constructing our own house. Just finished a coal mine decided to set up in our backyard. Definitely time to retire we moved to Queensland. I had been writing a manuscript for some time. In the desire to complete this I enrolled in a post grad certificate in creative Industries which I completed 2013. I followed this by doing a Master of Arts by research graduating in 2017. Now I live to write and write to live.
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27 Responses to Saved: Six Sentence Stories

  1. calmkate says:

    well written Irene, I used to love 6 word stories, first I’ve heard of 6 sentence stories!

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  2. Yes, I think this is the way it is, and this is what people feel when they’ve escaped an inferno.

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  3. Very vivid description, Irene.

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  4. A helluva way to start your day but she’s right to be thankful. Well written.

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  5. Deborah Lee says:

    I wonder what a rush of euphoria that must be at such a seemingly odd time, right after a catastrophe, but she’s absolutely right.

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  6. It could have been worse. Brilliant take Irene.

    Click to read my SSS!

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  7. Chilling! There was a house fire here yesterday, and the occupants were not so blessed.

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  8. waking up to those conditions (of a fire), bad, in the dead, dark of night? even worse.
    engaging Six, yo

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  9. Well done! Very vivid writing. What an emotional escape. So many range of emotions!

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