Clearing the Clutter: Friday Fictioneers

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photo prompt © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Closet Clutter. Clocks and candles, carpet bags and cosy slippers filled the cupboard to overflowing. Aunt Maisie hadn’t cared as long as the rest of the house was pristine perfect, untouched and unsullied. Jennie leant on the door, remembering how she’d squashed herself into the cupboard, comforted by the mess, when Aunt Maisie had told her she was making the place look untidy. “You’re a waste of space” she’d said. Now Aunt Maisie was dead. Her space was being sold. Jennie flicked through some papers.There’d been nothing of Maisie’s life in the house, perhaps she’d find it in the closet.

In response to Rochelle for both the photo prompt and hosting Friday Fictioneers.

About Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

I began my working career as a reluctant potato peeler whilst waiting to commence my training as a student nurse. On completion I worked mainly in intensive care/coronary care; finishing my hospital career as clinical nurse educator in intensive care. A life changing period as a resort owner/manager on the island of Tanna in Vanuatu was followed by recovery time as a farmer at Bucca Wauka. Having discovered I was no farmer and vowing never again to own an animal bigger than myself I took on the Barrington General Store. Here we also ran a five star restaurant. Working the shop of a day 7am - 6pm followed by the restaurant until late was surprisingly more stressful than Tanna. On the sale we decided to retire and renovate our house with the help of a builder friend. Now believing we knew everything about building we set to constructing our own house. Just finished a coal mine decided to set up in our backyard. Definitely time to retire we moved to Queensland. I had been writing a manuscript for some time. In the desire to complete this I enrolled in a post grad certificate in creative Industries which I completed 2013. I followed this by doing a Master of Arts by research graduating in 2017. Now I live to write and write to live.
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38 Responses to Clearing the Clutter: Friday Fictioneers

  1. Good one Irene, clutter also shows life 🙂

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  2. Iain Kelly says:

    We all have closets (or lofts/basements/garages) like this – and you can find out a lot about a person from what’s hidden away in there. Nicely told.

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  3. bbryanthomas says:

    Clutter means memories. Nice on

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  4. It is often those messy spaces that show our real lives. Nicely done.

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  5. Dear Irene,

    We all have those cluttered corners. I’ve shown my to the world this week. 😉 I wonder what she’ll find in the closet. Nice one.



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  6. Sandra says:

    It doesn’t sound like a very happy relationship. I’m surprised she wants to find out more about Aunt Maisie.

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  7. pennygadd51 says:

    You’ve made Aunt Maisie sound rather cold and unlikable. I wonder why she was so desperate to keep the house pristine? I wonder if there’s a metaphorical closet, as well as the actual one? You’ve piqued my curiosity, Irene! You’ve also written a piece that sounds good when read out loud. Well done.

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  8. I like the resonance of Cs in your first sentence. Hopefully she’ll find something to make her like Aunt Maisie a little.

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  9. Moon says:

    I don’t like aunt Maisie but I love your story . Ultimately, it doesn’t matter how flawlessly perfect the exterior is, if the interiors are so unclean.

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  10. Maz says:

    Love it… so much said in so few words…


  11. Interesting story – I hope she finds the essence of Aunt Maisie in the clutter.

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  12. Like drama reveals character, closets are not mess building but life revealing. I enjoyed this flash of life, Irene.

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  13. That messy space could well turn out to be a treasure trove. Nice one.

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  14. Dale says:

    So often a pristine-kept place hides the real stuff… maybe she will find answers in that mess

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  15. granonine says:

    Great alliteration in this piece. I hope Maisie finds something she can use.

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  16. Maybe she will find something to explain her aunt… some dark secrets maybe.

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  17. Yep, you have piqued your readers’ interest, including mine. Whatever Aunt Maisie was hiding/presenting, she ended up dead, inevitably, but the complexities of lived lives continues, perhaps to be untangled in that closet. Nicely structured, it does read well.

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  18. Sad story. Well told.

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  19. I felt for the narrator- liked the understated tone, describing a poignant story of her growing up unaffirmed. An affective story.

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