Seeing Red: 99 word Flash Fiction

“Shut those dogs up.”

“Yes” I was already out the door. “Hannibal! Lector! Come!” I walked towards the frenzied barking. Hearing ‘ Bwaaaaaaaaaaaaaak Bwak Bwak Bwaaaaaaaaaaaaaak.’ I ran.

I saw red.  Blood. Feathers. Anger. Talons. Inside the coop, wings wide it swooped, talons first. I screamed to scare. For help. Picking up a length of poly pipe I swiped. Now it was the hunted. I raised my pipe to hit again and again.

Suddenly I saw myself.  My reaction to terror the same as that I decried in my country. My role now – Peace: protect the chickens, love the hawk.

In response to Charli from the Carrot Ranch and her prompt for this weeks 99 word flash fiction where she asks:

October 19, 2016 prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story that includes a raptor. Let your imagination take wing, or dive into natural science. Tell a story about flight, talons or tail-feathers. Create a myth or share a BOTS (based on a true story). Set the raptor in a spectacular place or focus on bird itself. And for clarification, raptors are eagles, hawks, falcons and owls.

Respond by October 25, 2016 to be included in the compilation. Rules are here. All writers are welcome!

About Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

I began my working career as a reluctant potato peeler whilst waiting to commence my training as a student nurse. On completion I worked mainly in intensive care/coronary care; finishing my hospital career as clinical nurse educator in intensive care. A life changing period as a resort owner/manager on the island of Tanna in Vanuatu was followed by recovery time as a farmer at Bucca Wauka. Having discovered I was no farmer and vowing never again to own an animal bigger than myself I took on the Barrington General Store. Here we also ran a five star restaurant. Working the shop of a day 7am - 6pm followed by the restaurant until late was surprisingly more stressful than Tanna. On the sale we decided to retire and renovate our house with the help of a builder friend. Now believing we knew everything about building we set to constructing our own house. Just finished a coal mine decided to set up in our backyard. Definitely time to retire we moved to Queensland. I had been writing a manuscript for some time. In the desire to complete this I enrolled in a post grad certificate in creative Industries which I completed 2013. I followed this by doing a Master of Arts by research graduating in 2017. Now I live to write and write to live.
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13 Responses to Seeing Red: 99 word Flash Fiction

  1. Hmmm…politics everywhere? Or just everyday events.

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    • I did catch myself acting in anger to a particular chicken hawk and I was not happy with myself at all. But politics is everywhere. Particularly political correctness which I am not a fan of but neither am I a fan of saying things that are hurtful to other people.

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      • The atmosphere here in the U.S. is so toxic, you have to know where the person standing next to you stands before your open your mouth on any subject. We were supposed to be the great and successful experiment in democracy but our ideals and values have been trampled by vicious commentary and accusations. I’m so proud to be an American, but lucky for you that you don’t live here right now. It’s hard to breathe.

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      • I can understand how you must be feeling. We are overwhelmed with it here and it really has nothing to do with us. I’m sorry that your ideals and values feel like they’ve been trampled. I hope for your sake and the world’s that when the election is over we can have a conversation about what makes us so fearful that the far right is being seen as the salvation. Keep that oxygen flowing.

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  2. Sherri says:

    Hannibal and Lector – nice touch with the names Irene! Oh it’s been so long since I visited you here my friend…how I have missed your wonderful posts. Speaking of which, before I forget, can you send me the link to your article that you recently had published? I had saved it but can’t find it anywhere 😦 I think a recent update is to blame. Thank you, I really want to read it! Your flash really has me thinking, as well as your conversation above with Sharon. It’s natural to react in anger if something is killing our chickens, but I love how you used the analogy with the politics of the day when there is so much rage, fear, mistrust and terror lurking everywhere it seems. Great flash Irene, great to read you again. Lots of love ❤

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    • Missed you too Sherri but totally understand why. The link is
      Thanks for getting the flash. I think it is exactly what happens only one is on a personal level affecting few and the other affects millions but we have to stop and think how easily it happens. Lots of love. Glad to see you whenever you can make it. 🙂

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      • Sherri says:

        Thanks Irene. I just read your article and found it fascinating. Congratulations again on getting it published. I really enjoyed reading more about your life and your earlier experiences. Very interesting reading about your heady days as a nurse, exposed to the most horrific deaths so young and how it made you all the more want to have fun and not worry about the future. And all of you still enjoying life today…that’s great! Also the story about John…that is quite something and now you have me wondering too! Very well written, the way you intersperse your essay with your personal memoir reflections. Great article my friend! I hope you’re having a good week, I ‘ll be back very soon. Lots of love and big hugs 🙂 ❤ xxx

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      • Thank you for reading it Sherri and even better that you enjoyed it. Hope all is well with you Sherri. See you soon. 🙂

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      • Sherri says:

        Thanks Irene, doing okay, working on those revisions. Hope with you too my friend. I’ll be in touch…have a wonderful weekend and yes, see you soon…hopefully for a good long walk if you are able to put on your boots again…lots of love and big hugs and 🙂 ❤ xxx

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      • Good to hear it Sherri. I can actually get into some walking shoes so lets get going. Got lots to tell you. Lots of love back and hugs across the ocean. 🙂


  3. Charli Mills says:

    Like Sherri, I found the names fantastic! Your flash is a lesson in reation out of protection and yes, it does segue into politics. It’s embarrassing, but how can the world not notice American politics right now. And I feel sad to think it’s a global crisis. Sometimes I hope it’s growing pains and we all get through this to a better way of communicating and living together. Otherwise, it’s tempting to grab a pipe.

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    • I can assure you the world is noticing your politics. This morning I had an email that told me ” Apparently more AmerIcans think Trump is honest than think Hilary is honest. Yet he has a proven history of blatant lying (apparently over 70% of things he says are provably false) and a long documented history of breaking contracts to pay people, etc. Fraud and assault.
      But I kind of understand that Hilary is on the nose. She is part of the establishment (the perpetual war machine and the impunity of banks and wall street) that people are really realizing is screwing them. the bizarre thing is that Trump is even more so, plus certifiably lunatic and criminal. At least with Hilary you get intelligent cunning standard political behaviour.” Lets keep the fingers crossed.
      It would be great if it does lead to better communication and peace living together. Lets hope the pipe can stay something for water to flow through.


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