Let me show you: 99 Word Flash fiction


The agent brought two men,one  woman and a dog.”Can you show them around Pippa?” he asked the store’s owner. “You know the business.” Pippa complied showing them the store, the residence and the land that completed the package.  The man, John, made her squirm, reminding her of some slimy men she’d met in the city. He expected her to fawn over him. She didn’t need to sell it that badly. Why her when she was paying an agent? Before leaving the dog killed a chicken.

Subsequently they returned and informed her they’d bought a turkey farm. Inwardly she smiled.

In response to Anne’s prompt for Charli’s 99 word flash fiction  where she asks:

I’m inviting you to compose a 99-word flash on the theme of showing someone around a property. Who’s showing whom, and how do they feel about it? Is it a country house, a garden shed or something in between? Is it even a building or is it a piece of land or a virtual property like website or blog? Don’t let your imagination be constrained by four walls.

If you’re new here (and if so, you’re most welcome), you might want tocheck out the rules. If you’re a regular, you know the drill, post here by3rd May 2016 to be included in next Wednesday’s compilation.


About Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

I began my working career as a reluctant potato peeler whilst waiting to commence my training as a student nurse. On completion I worked mainly in intensive care/coronary care; finishing my hospital career as clinical nurse educator in intensive care. A life changing period as a resort owner/manager on the island of Tanna in Vanuatu was followed by recovery time as a farmer at Bucca Wauka. Having discovered I was no farmer and vowing never again to own an animal bigger than myself I took on the Barrington General Store. Here we also ran a five star restaurant. Working the shop of a day 7am - 6pm followed by the restaurant until late was surprisingly more stressful than Tanna. On the sale we decided to retire and renovate our house with the help of a builder friend. Now believing we knew everything about building we set to constructing our own house. Just finished a coal mine decided to set up in our backyard. Definitely time to retire we moved to Queensland. I had been writing a manuscript for some time. In the desire to complete this I enrolled in a post grad certificate in creative Industries which I completed 2013. I followed this by doing a Master of Arts by research graduating in 2017. Now I live to write and write to live.
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9 Responses to Let me show you: 99 Word Flash fiction

  1. Norah says:

    Ooh, how unpleasant. It makes me squirm too. You obviously achieved your goal. Well done.

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  2. Annecdotist says:

    Ha, they’ll need to have that dog under better control if they want their turkey farm to prosper!

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  3. Rosanna says:

    What I like about flash fiction is the way it twists and then ends….leaving you wanting to know more. Hmmm, I’d like to know if the man paid for the chicken; did the dog like the taste of the chicken?…this is a creativity-stimulating story!

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  4. Charli Mills says:

    An oblivious buyer who is about to get better acquainted with his own dog! I love your dark humor and the great names you always have for your characters. I feel a bit like Pippa — why I am the one having to answer the questions. I’m not being paid as an agent. I’m going to practice more of Anne’s suggestive flash.

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