Friday Fictioneers: Stay away from the Light


© Stephen Baum

The police caught me speeding.

” Hospital.” I ramped up a wheeze. They put me in the police car, sirens blaring, the asthma no longer feigned. I struggled to breathe. I had no breath to talk. The doctors and nurses rushed. Oxygen. Intravenous cannula. Nebulised ventolin.

“Nurse give her 100mg aminophylline IV stat.” The doctor ordered. She came with a large syringe of the drug and inserted it to the intravenous line, swiftly injecting it. 

My breathing stopped. I could see the light. As I approached it I watched them scrambling below 


This time, I’d stayed away from the light.

In response to Rochelle’s Friday Fictioneers. and the photo prompt provided by  Stephen Baum.  For other entries go to Rochelle’s site and follow the blue frog to the other links. All are welcome to join in writing 100 words to the photo prompt.

About Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

I began my working career as a reluctant potato peeler whilst waiting to commence my training as a student nurse. On completion I worked mainly in intensive care/coronary care; finishing my hospital career as clinical nurse educator in intensive care. A life changing period as a resort owner/manager on the island of Tanna in Vanuatu was followed by recovery time as a farmer at Bucca Wauka. Having discovered I was no farmer and vowing never again to own an animal bigger than myself I took on the Barrington General Store. Here we also ran a five star restaurant. Working the shop of a day 7am - 6pm followed by the restaurant until late was surprisingly more stressful than Tanna. On the sale we decided to retire and renovate our house with the help of a builder friend. Now believing we knew everything about building we set to constructing our own house. Just finished a coal mine decided to set up in our backyard. Definitely time to retire we moved to Queensland. I had been writing a manuscript for some time. In the desire to complete this I enrolled in a post grad certificate in creative Industries which I completed 2013. I followed this by doing a Master of Arts by research graduating in 2017. Now I live to write and write to live.
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35 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: Stay away from the Light

  1. Norah says:

    Great story, Irene. Good build up of tension. So pleased “you” managed to stay away from the light this time.

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  2. Anita says:

    This is what happens when people approach death. have read real-life accounts of ‘back from the dead’. Your story reminded me of those 🙂
    Nice to avoid that light till it’s time!!!

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  3. Sandra says:

    Graphic description of an asthmatic attack. Never cry wolf… Good one.

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  4. I have heard about that light.. like the entrance of Plato’s cave where we all are trapped.

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  5. wildbilbo says:

    I understand wanting to get out of a fine, but I think I’d pull up short of swapping ‘flashing police lights’ for ‘the light at the end of the tunnel’ 🙂

    I think you’ve done a good job of very quickly building the this tension in this scene. Nice work.

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  6. Dear Irene,

    That’s certainly a ruse that backfired. I warrant she’ll think twice about pulling that one again. Nicely done. Very nicely done.



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  7. Vinay Leo R. says:

    It wasn’t time for the light yet, Irene. Still a long time left for her I think. 🙂 Loved the buildup!

    My #FF

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  8. An economic use of words but a gripping, suspenseful story. I learned a lot just by reading this.

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  9. I loved the heroics of this. My gal needed this nurse I think.

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  10. Paula says:

    Excellent thriller, Irene!

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  11. ceayr says:

    Well that was exciting, left me breathless as well!

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  12. Dale says:

    Nothing worse than when a lie becomes reality!

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  13. Great job in making this an enjoyable read and I like the twist in the story. Very nice!

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  14. gahlearner says:

    I’m glad the MC stays away from the light. Great building of tension, right from the start.

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  15. Sherri says:

    Not quite time to walk into the light yet…this is a subject that fascinates me. Great flash for the photo Irene, packed with tension and loved how it resolved at the end 🙂

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