99 Word Flash Fiction: Creepy

© irene waters 2014

© irene waters 2014

Working in a hospital that is being closed is not enjoyable. Bit by bit the life that fills the corridors and wards decreases. The demoralised staff, worry about their future, as the patients become smaller in number. The Intensive Care Unit is the first to have no patients. Routine surgery requiring intensive care ceases weeks before the closure. The ambulances are diverting traffic accidents and medical emergencies to other hospitals. Highly trained nurses sit and twiddle their thumbs. They aren’t used to such inactivity and are bored. Bored out of their minds. Their help is not required elsewhere as the wards too are winding down.

“Come on,” the two nurses begged Jake. “We’re bored. It’ll be fun.”

“Okay”. Reluctantly he submitted to their plan.

Lying on the trolley, wrapped in a shroud, he heard them make the intensive care unit look as though recent action had taken place. He heard the swing doors open.

“Can you take the patient to the morgue Nurse? We have a lot of work to do here.”

“Yes sister.”

Jake felt the trolley rolling. Hearing the lift doors open, he sat.

The nurse screamed.

Hours later, the morgue doors opened, the trolley rolled in. No longer would Jake sit.

I have pondered long and hard on this event. It was creepy and has spooked me ever since. Was there peace to be found inside that shroud?

In response to Charli’s prompt October 22, 2014 prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a creepy story. It can be prompted by the green fog in the photo, an imaginative idea about the Beals or take place in a cemetery. If other creepy ideas take hold, go for it! We’ll all shudder and be in the mood for Halloween–or grateful for its passing.

Respond by October 28 to be included in the weekly compilation.

About Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

I began my working career as a reluctant potato peeler whilst waiting to commence my training as a student nurse. On completion I worked mainly in intensive care/coronary care; finishing my hospital career as clinical nurse educator in intensive care. A life changing period as a resort owner/manager on the island of Tanna in Vanuatu was followed by recovery time as a farmer at Bucca Wauka. Having discovered I was no farmer and vowing never again to own an animal bigger than myself I took on the Barrington General Store. Here we also ran a five star restaurant. Working the shop of a day 7am - 6pm followed by the restaurant until late was surprisingly more stressful than Tanna. On the sale we decided to retire and renovate our house with the help of a builder friend. Now believing we knew everything about building we set to constructing our own house. Just finished a coal mine decided to set up in our backyard. Definitely time to retire we moved to Queensland. I had been writing a manuscript for some time. In the desire to complete this I enrolled in a post grad certificate in creative Industries which I completed 2013. I followed this by doing a Master of Arts by research graduating in 2017. Now I live to write and write to live.
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19 Responses to 99 Word Flash Fiction: Creepy

  1. Creepy, Irene. Very apropos of Halloween!


  2. Abandoned places (hospitals would definitely be on the top of my list) are creepy to me. Anything set there would thoroughly do me in. I know this one was just closing but, still. Great flash.


  3. Sherri says:

    This photo is very spooky. Empty buildings like this really do creep me out and your flash has given me much to ponder about Jake…getting shivers just thinking about it. In Salisbury there is a huge mental health hospital that has been boarded up and closed for many years. Whenever we drive by it I get the shivers, just imagining what it would be to walk around it alone at night. I torture myself with things like that! Great flash my friend, perfect for Halloween 🙂

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  4. M-R says:

    Creepy INDEED ! – and all the better for being left to our imagination. Bravo, Irene !

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  5. Charli Mills says:

    The photo is so empty that it oozes creepiness–it’s just not supposed to be that way! It must have felt depressing as everything came to a halt. And the perfect time for a little fun that can go wrong against the pranksters! Creepy is found in the unexpected!


    • Very true Charli. I have never worked amongst such demoralized people as at that hospital
      Empty is creepy. Some parts of hospitals are creepy of a night for that reason in day surgery areas and the like. You’re right – it is the unexpected that gives us the creeps.


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  7. I worked on the nightshift in a London Hospital and there were some really strange noises going on. Spooky. 😀


  8. Lisa Reiter says:

    Ooo! A fab twist – made the hairs stand up on the back of my neck!
    I used to get the eebeegeebies working late in an office. A near deserted hospital must be really creepy! And all those ghosts.. 👻


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