99 Word flash Fiction: The crows

This week Charli’s prompt asks for sound.  August 27, 2014 prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) use sound to announce some sort of change. It could be at the beginning of the story–a lonely bar keep on a quiet road hears the rumble of motorcycles and anticipates customers. That could be good news or bad…Or you could tell a story that unfolds as expected until a character hears something–like a bride getting ready upstairs at the church who hears a shattering below followed by the shouts of her groom, “I’m outta here!” Sound can trumpet, clang or whisper. It can foreshadow or be the twist.

Respond by noon (PST) Tuesday, September 2 to be included in the compilation.

“Look at those crows circling.” Marcia said “Gives me the creeps knowing someone’s going to die tonight. Like vultures waiting to take the soul to another place.”

“Don’t be stupid. That’s just an old wives tale.” Peter’s exasperation was apparent. “Just because they’re circling doesn’t mean anyone’s going to die.” They walked on in silence, lost in their own thoughts.

Crrrrrack!  Peter looked up at the noise to see the branch falling rapidly toward him.

Boom! The ground shook from the force of the impact. Marcia shook her head as she looked at Peter’s lifeless eyes. “Old wives tale huh?”

About Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

I began my working career as a reluctant potato peeler whilst waiting to commence my training as a student nurse. On completion I worked mainly in intensive care/coronary care; finishing my hospital career as clinical nurse educator in intensive care. A life changing period as a resort owner/manager on the island of Tanna in Vanuatu was followed by recovery time as a farmer at Bucca Wauka. Having discovered I was no farmer and vowing never again to own an animal bigger than myself I took on the Barrington General Store. Here we also ran a five star restaurant. Working the shop of a day 7am - 6pm followed by the restaurant until late was surprisingly more stressful than Tanna. On the sale we decided to retire and renovate our house with the help of a builder friend. Now believing we knew everything about building we set to constructing our own house. Just finished a coal mine decided to set up in our backyard. Definitely time to retire we moved to Queensland. I had been writing a manuscript for some time. In the desire to complete this I enrolled in a post grad certificate in creative Industries which I completed 2013. I followed this by doing a Master of Arts by research graduating in 2017. Now I live to write and write to live.
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17 Responses to 99 Word flash Fiction: The crows

  1. Charli Mills says:

    That is morbidly funny! And an interesting take, too on the prompt as I fully anticipated the sound to come from the crows but it came from the cracking branch. That’s a good twist to keep us riveted! Growing up, I learned the Native American version–an owl outside your house (or teepee) signaled death to someone inside. One of my favorite songs by Michael Martin Murphy is Wildfire, about a woman who goes missing chasing her horse. One chilling line is, “There’s been a hoot owl outside my window now three days in a row; she’s coming for me I know and on Wildfire we’re both gonna go…”

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  2. One word on this, Irene: Ouch!


  3. Sherri says:

    Oh dear. So much for that old wives tale! I love your flash twists Irene and this is no exception 🙂


  4. Annecdotist says:

    Poor Peter! Really shouldn’t laugh at his sad demise … but can’t help it.


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  6. Laura Burke says:

    Fun entry — poor guy.


  7. Norah says:

    Great story Irene. I really enjoy the twist – serves him right! Just goes to show – belief or non-belief makes something neither true nor untrue! 🙂


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