99 word Flash Fiction: Out of the comfort zone

Thanks Geoff for prompting Charli to prompt us to visit multiverses. I have read a few books where other worlds exist in the same time as that in which the protagonist lives their normal life. As a child C.S. Lewis’s tales of Narnia had me enthralled and when I found my husband had not been subjected to this classic in his childhood I immediately bought a second-hand version so he too could have the pleasure. I don’t know that he has yet read it but I certainly enjoyed revisiting the world beyond the wardrobe. A later book The Good Mayor by Andrew Nicoll also has a parallel world. Possibly the first fantasy book I have taken to as an adult – a modern-day fairy tale. I tend to be grounded in the real and for me this prompt has been very difficult and put me way outside my comfort zone. However, dog walks are beneficial to idea formation and as I leaned over the bridge rail scanning the river for sting rays an idea finally came….

John jumped from the bridge without giving a second glance back. The swirling river below engulfed him, taking him into the dark depths. A crack of light appeared along with a voice whispering “Stay away from the light, ” but the current propelled him toward it.

Caught in an eddy he hurtled through the void and suddenly aware of the sun warming his now naked flesh he saw he lay in a verdant field. Rising he headed towards the sun uncertain where he should be headed. Thundering past  the unicorns beckoned.

“Blast. Last time I landed in Paris with Hemingway.”

About Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist

I began my working career as a reluctant potato peeler whilst waiting to commence my training as a student nurse. On completion I worked mainly in intensive care/coronary care; finishing my hospital career as clinical nurse educator in intensive care. A life changing period as a resort owner/manager on the island of Tanna in Vanuatu was followed by recovery time as a farmer at Bucca Wauka. Having discovered I was no farmer and vowing never again to own an animal bigger than myself I took on the Barrington General Store. Here we also ran a five star restaurant. Working the shop of a day 7am - 6pm followed by the restaurant until late was surprisingly more stressful than Tanna. On the sale we decided to retire and renovate our house with the help of a builder friend. Now believing we knew everything about building we set to constructing our own house. Just finished a coal mine decided to set up in our backyard. Definitely time to retire we moved to Queensland. I had been writing a manuscript for some time. In the desire to complete this I enrolled in a post grad certificate in creative Industries which I completed 2013. I followed this by doing a Master of Arts by research graduating in 2017. Now I live to write and write to live.
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20 Responses to 99 word Flash Fiction: Out of the comfort zone

  1. TanGental says:

    Brilliant Irene. That one has me smiling and so much less stressful that the Time Traveller’s Wife.


  2. Sherri says:

    Love this story Irene, love your sense of humour! Got a wonderful image right now in my mind… 🙂


  3. Tricksy, to coin a Tolkien term. I loved the ending.


  4. joannesisco says:

    This story is a teaser! The ending caught me by surprise … and I don’t want it to end. It begs for more 🙂


  5. susanzutautas says:

    It sure doesn’t read as if you had a hard time with it. I’d like more too.


  6. Charli Mills says:

    Wonderful re-visitation of a few prompts too–unicorns and cracks! Love the plunge over the bridge and the twist of humor in the last line. Wow–really? You look for stingrays from the bridge? That sounds so cool!


  7. Norah says:

    Love it! Paris with Hemingway? I’d probably choose Satre or Monet. 🙂


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