1. Drawn blue and white floral curtains cooled the room from the febrile day outside by casting it in shadows. The immense bed was the only piece of furniture, gaily covered in the cheap cotton material which also draped the windows. Two worn towels were origamied at the foot of the bed with large red hibiscus flowers placed on top of them. A fan slowly whirred on the ceiling above, moving the shadows with each rotation. A setting any faster would have seen the dust being lifted from the woven bamboo walls and the thatch of the roof above. The brick-red painted cement of the floor seemed to join seamlessly with the door frame in which I stood.
2. The drawn floral curtains cast the room in shadows cooling it from the febrile day outside. The same cheap cotton material covered the immense bed, the only furniture in the room, brightened by the red hibiscus placed on the towels at its foot. A fan whirred above it; not fast enough to dislodge the dust from the woven bamboo walls and thatched roof above. The red-painted cement floor seemed to join seamlessly with the door frame in which I stood.
3. The whirring fan above the immense, hibiscus-strewn bed cast shadows on the dusty, woven bamboo walls.
Minimalism with words – When preparing a pitch to a publisher, three are required.
One brief – one word to one line.
One short – a couple of sentences at most
One longer – approximately 150 words.
This really makes you focus on what your manuscript is about. To go from 50,000 – 80,000 words down to one word or one line really makes you focus on what is your book about if you are to impart its essence.
Similarly doing the same with a piece of descriptive writing can make for a very strong single sentence and makes for a good writing exercise.